The Crypt of Baylor
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Okay, but what is the actual WORD? It's an abbreviation, and surely the word isn't "Ma" given that a large number of human languages use some version of that sound for "Mother."
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Updates: reworded and checked the style guide.
Added players map (for those who use vtts if that's a thing that might be useful to add to pdfs)
Added players map (for those who use vtts if that's a thing that might be useful to add to pdfs)
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Revision 7, Changed some fonts on the maps, added a regional map of sorts. I have a couple of other little adventures in mind based around that small area.
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Re: [AA4] The Crypt of Baylor
Starting all over.
Page 3.
"The bandits quickly cleared out the cave and found that it led into an old crypt of a forgotten local lord,".
Should be "the" old crypt unless there is more than one.
"Despite being under strict instructions not to open any sarcophagi"
Should be singular thus "sarcophagus".
Page 4.
"while the moral remains of his wife decayed into dust."
Should be mortal, I think.
Page 3.
"The bandits quickly cleared out the cave and found that it led into an old crypt of a forgotten local lord,".
Should be "the" old crypt unless there is more than one.
"Despite being under strict instructions not to open any sarcophagi"
Should be singular thus "sarcophagus".
Page 4.
"while the moral remains of his wife decayed into dust."
Should be mortal, I think.
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I wasn't sure, so I checked some grammar site.
Seems like the meaning is "do not open any one thing".
If the meaning was "do not open any 2 or more things", it would be OK to open one sarcophagus.
Of course, I could be wrong.
I'm no English teacher.
So very far from that.
Seems like the meaning is "do not open any one thing".
If the meaning was "do not open any 2 or more things", it would be OK to open one sarcophagus.
Of course, I could be wrong.
I'm no English teacher.
So very far from that.
Re: [AA4] The Crypt of Baylor
Still page 4 "and his gang of outlaws.."
Probably just the one coma.
Page 6
4.
"crumb ling mortar"
Probably just the one coma.
Page 6
4.
"crumb ling mortar"
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Re: [AA4] The Crypt of Baylor
"Sarcophagi" seems correct to me. Maybe rephrase it? "Leave all sarcophagi unopened" or something similar.Seven wrote: ↑Thu Apr 22, 2021 7:43 am I wasn't sure, so I checked some grammar site.
Seems like the meaning is "do not open any one thing".
If the meaning was "do not open any 2 or more things", it would be OK to open one sarcophagus.
Of course, I could be wrong.
I'm no English teacher.
So very far from that.
"My love is my sword."
"If I were you I'd stay away from thoughts like that."
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"If I were you I'd stay away from thoughts like that."
-Dekar and Guy, Lufia II
Re: [AA4] The Crypt of Baylor
"...not to open any of the sarcophagi" reads better to me than "...not to open any sarcophagi"
I also like Minkey's possible edit/re-write
I also like Minkey's possible edit/re-write
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