Chrysogon's Coterie - 288 NPCs for your Campaign
Re: Chrysogon's Coterie - 288 NPCs for your Campaign
I've attached an r15a, with those items addressed.
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Thanks Chi, and yes. Version 7.4.3.2.
If you're satisfied with it, I'm ready to hand it off. In 15 passes, I've polished it as well as I can. If there are any errors left, they are very minor and unlikely to affect use or enjoyment.
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Here's feedback on eight- and ninth-level NPCs.
Pg 77 Dahlia Ware: "of her Deity" and "the Deity’s Will" should be lowercase, and "invisible" shouldn't be bold.
Pg 84 Ailish Fylani: Dagger +1 needs to be bold.
Pg 85 Rylee Thatchere: "RileyRylee will tell anyone..."
Pg 87 Halle Haldor: "But Willow, fearing for her safety, escorted her under armed guard to the Temple of the Invisible, leaking news of the event to bystanders as it happened." I'm having a hard time understanding the idea of leaking news happening right in front of people. What's the secret being divulged? Many curious witnesses watch her go in, and Willow explains exactly who it is? Then, "her former employer has retained Cyprian Ovicula (q.v.) to investigate her disappearance." What's left to investigate? I must be misunderstanding something.
Pg 89 Euphemia Servilianus: "...involved with piety. It’_s not just the good behavior..." (Stray space).
Pg 90 Godiva Lockshorne: I cannot wait to see the illustration of a naked lady Dwarf for this entry. Technically, she could do 1d3+1 subduing damage by kicking.
Pg 93 Wulfstan Hunte: "He witnessed other parents being killed by soldiers, but not his own,. but He was assured that they were also killed for their attempts to deceive and conceal.
I'm guessing Wulfstan is Human, but that's not included in the stat line.
Pg 77 Dahlia Ware: "of her Deity" and "the Deity’s Will" should be lowercase, and "invisible" shouldn't be bold.
Pg 84 Ailish Fylani: Dagger +1 needs to be bold.
Pg 85 Rylee Thatchere: "RileyRylee will tell anyone..."
Pg 87 Halle Haldor: "But Willow, fearing for her safety, escorted her under armed guard to the Temple of the Invisible, leaking news of the event to bystanders as it happened." I'm having a hard time understanding the idea of leaking news happening right in front of people. What's the secret being divulged? Many curious witnesses watch her go in, and Willow explains exactly who it is? Then, "her former employer has retained Cyprian Ovicula (q.v.) to investigate her disappearance." What's left to investigate? I must be misunderstanding something.
Pg 89 Euphemia Servilianus: "...involved with piety. It’_s not just the good behavior..." (Stray space).
Pg 90 Godiva Lockshorne: I cannot wait to see the illustration of a naked lady Dwarf for this entry. Technically, she could do 1d3+1 subduing damage by kicking.
Pg 93 Wulfstan Hunte: "He witnessed other parents being killed by soldiers, but not his own,. but He was assured that they were also killed for their attempts to deceive and conceal.
I'm guessing Wulfstan is Human, but that's not included in the stat line.
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And with Leon and Chi now having taken a full pass through this manuscript, I'm uploading the result as Revision 16. I will not be doing any more complete read-throughs and any further comments will be saved up for future inclusion on a much slower release cycle.
I want to thank Kyle, Leon, Chris and Chi for helping with this.
I want to thank Kyle, Leon, Chris and Chi for helping with this.
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Someone has their work cut out for them to both place her hair and limbs strategically, and make sure she's true to her CHA stat.
Leon -- you're the man. Thanks for sifting through this.
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Saw the Facebook post on this and just wanted to swing by and offer a hearty thanks for the hard work on this awesome future supplement. Looks amazing so far.
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Thank you! It was definitely a labour of love.FakeHealer wrote: ↑Fri Dec 30, 2022 8:53 pm a hearty thanks for the hard work on this awesome future supplement.
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Don't know if you can use this, but here's hoping. It is also in my art thread (teaman) for use in any other capacity.
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Thanks, John. I'm sure there will be room in the book. I'm hoping for an average of 3 images per pair of open pages, and I'm at least a few dozen images short based on what I submitted .
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Great, hopefully there's an elven wizard or cleric waiting for the image. Or even a half-elf.
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