Basic Fantasy RPG Core Rules 4th Edition
Re: Basic Fantasy RPG Core Rules 4th Edition
The first clause of the second sentence on page 43 ("Generally one player will do this, drawing a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor.") lacks a verb (what is the player doing?). How about "Generally one player will draw a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor."?
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Re: Basic Fantasy RPG Core Rules 4th Edition
With respect, it's not wrong. What the player is doing is "making maps;" "do this" refers to what the previous sentence described.bugleyman wrote: ↑Tue Mar 21, 2023 11:21 pm The first clause of the second sentence on page 43 ("Generally one player will do this, drawing a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor.") lacks a verb (what is the player doing?). How about "Generally one player will draw a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor."?
The full context is:
The first sentence describes an action; the second sentence talks about how that action is performed (or at least, by whom).In any dungeon expedition, making maps is important. Generally one player will do this, drawing a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor.
Grammatical corrections are welcome! However, I don't believe this is wrong.
My wife does think my version is awkward, but agrees it is not wrong.
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Ah, so. Fixed. Thanks!bugleyman wrote: ↑Tue Mar 21, 2023 10:49 pm Near the end of page 9, the closing parenthesis appears to be missing from the note about subduing damage.
The text currently reads:
“(in which case subduing damage is done, as explained on page 55.”
But should probably read:
“(in which case subduing damage is done, as explained on page 55).”
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Re: Basic Fantasy RPG Core Rules 4th Edition
personally I'd just drop the "do this" to make it less clunky "Generally one player draw a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor."Solomoriah wrote: ↑Wed Mar 22, 2023 1:02 amGrammatical corrections are welcome! However, I don't believe this is wrong.
My wife does think my version is awkward, but agrees it is not wrong.
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Perhaps. But it's how I speak, and given that it's not wrong, I'm not changing it.
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Re: Basic Fantasy RPG Core Rules 4th Edition
A good time to remind everyone that the source version of the book (.ODT) is available for people to download, wordsmith, and otherwise modify to their heart's content.Solomoriah wrote: ↑Wed Mar 22, 2023 8:18 amPerhaps. But it's how I speak, and given that it's not wrong, I'm not changing it.
Re: Basic Fantasy RPG Core Rules 4th Edition
In hindsight I should have written "style suggestions" rather than "grammatical corrections" in my note. I'll avoid the former in future posts, as I now appreciate that you are deliberately employing a conversational style.Solomoriah wrote: ↑Wed Mar 22, 2023 1:02 amWith respect, it's not wrong. What the player is doing is "making maps;" "do this" refers to what the previous sentence described.bugleyman wrote: ↑Tue Mar 21, 2023 11:21 pm The first clause of the second sentence on page 43 ("Generally one player will do this, drawing a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor.") lacks a verb (what is the player doing?). How about "Generally one player will draw a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor."?
The full context is:
The first sentence describes an action; the second sentence talks about how that action is performed (or at least, by whom).In any dungeon expedition, making maps is important. Generally one player will do this, drawing a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor.
Grammatical corrections are welcome! However, I don't believe this is wrong.
My wife does think my version is awkward, but agrees it is not wrong.
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Re: Basic Fantasy RPG Core Rules 4th Edition
And therein lies the source of much truth.Solomoriah wrote: ↑Wed Mar 22, 2023 1:02 am My wife does think my version is awkward, but agrees it is not wrong.
Re: Basic Fantasy RPG Core Rules 4th Edition
Page 17, the second sentence of the description of Animate Objects reads:
"Objects to be animated may not be in the possession (worn or carried) by any creature, and
must be non-magical in nature..."
It should probably read:
"Objects to be animated may not be in the possession (worn or carried) of any creature, and
must be non-magical in nature..."
"Objects to be animated may not be in the possession (worn or carried) by any creature, and
must be non-magical in nature..."
It should probably read:
"Objects to be animated may not be in the possession (worn or carried) of any creature, and
must be non-magical in nature..."
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Re: Basic Fantasy RPG Core Rules 4th Edition
Page 19, the first sentence of the description of Cloudkill, reads:
"This spell creates a 20'x20'x20' cloud of poison gas which moves at a rate of 10' per round under the control of the caster (so long as they concentrates on it)."
It should probably read:
"This spell creates a 20'x20'x20' cloud of poison gas which moves at a rate of 10' per round under the control of the caster (so long as they concentrate on it)."
"This spell creates a 20'x20'x20' cloud of poison gas which moves at a rate of 10' per round under the control of the caster (so long as they concentrates on it)."
It should probably read:
"This spell creates a 20'x20'x20' cloud of poison gas which moves at a rate of 10' per round under the control of the caster (so long as they concentrate on it)."
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