Basic Fantasy RPG Core Rules 4th Edition

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Re: Basic Fantasy RPG Core Rules 4th Edition

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The first clause of the second sentence on page 43 ("Generally one player will do this, drawing a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor.") lacks a verb (what is the player doing?). How about "Generally one player will draw a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor."?

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bugleyman wrote: Tue Mar 21, 2023 11:21 pm The first clause of the second sentence on page 43 ("Generally one player will do this, drawing a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor.") lacks a verb (what is the player doing?). How about "Generally one player will draw a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor."?
With respect, it's not wrong. What the player is doing is "making maps;" "do this" refers to what the previous sentence described.

The full context is:
In any dungeon expedition, making maps is important. Generally one player will do this, drawing a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor.
The first sentence describes an action; the second sentence talks about how that action is performed (or at least, by whom).
bugleyman wrote: Tue Mar 21, 2023 11:21 pm (Note: if grammatical corrections aren't of interest, please let me know and I won't post them!)
Grammatical corrections are welcome! However, I don't believe this is wrong.

My wife does think my version is awkward, but agrees it is not wrong.
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bugleyman wrote: Tue Mar 21, 2023 10:49 pm Near the end of page 9, the closing parenthesis appears to be missing from the note about subduing damage.

The text currently reads:

“(in which case subduing damage is done, as explained on page 55.”

But should probably read:

“(in which case subduing damage is done, as explained on page 55).”
Ah, so. Fixed. Thanks!
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Solomoriah wrote: Wed Mar 22, 2023 1:02 am
bugleyman wrote: Tue Mar 21, 2023 11:21 pmw and I won't post them!)
Grammatical corrections are welcome! However, I don't believe this is wrong.

My wife does think my version is awkward, but agrees it is not wrong.
personally I'd just drop the "do this" to make it less clunky "Generally one player draw a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor."
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Boggo wrote: Wed Mar 22, 2023 1:40 am personally I'd just drop the "do this" to make it less clunky "Generally one player draw a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor."
Perhaps. But it's how I speak, and given that it's not wrong, I'm not changing it.
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Solomoriah wrote: Wed Mar 22, 2023 8:18 am
Boggo wrote: Wed Mar 22, 2023 1:40 am personally I'd just drop the "do this" to make it less clunky "Generally one player draw a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor."
Perhaps. But it's how I speak, and given that it's not wrong, I'm not changing it.
A good time to remind everyone that the source version of the book (.ODT) is available for people to download, wordsmith, and otherwise modify to their heart's content.
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Re: Basic Fantasy RPG Core Rules 4th Edition

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Solomoriah wrote: Wed Mar 22, 2023 1:02 am
bugleyman wrote: Tue Mar 21, 2023 11:21 pm The first clause of the second sentence on page 43 ("Generally one player will do this, drawing a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor.") lacks a verb (what is the player doing?). How about "Generally one player will draw a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor."?
With respect, it's not wrong. What the player is doing is "making maps;" "do this" refers to what the previous sentence described.

The full context is:
In any dungeon expedition, making maps is important. Generally one player will do this, drawing a map on graph paper as the Game Master describes each room or corridor.
The first sentence describes an action; the second sentence talks about how that action is performed (or at least, by whom).
bugleyman wrote: Tue Mar 21, 2023 11:21 pm (Note: if grammatical corrections aren't of interest, please let me know and I won't post them!)
Grammatical corrections are welcome! However, I don't believe this is wrong.

My wife does think my version is awkward, but agrees it is not wrong.
In hindsight I should have written "style suggestions" rather than "grammatical corrections" in my note. I'll avoid the former in future posts, as I now appreciate that you are deliberately employing a conversational style. :)
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Solomoriah wrote: Wed Mar 22, 2023 1:02 am My wife does think my version is awkward, but agrees it is not wrong.
And therein lies the source of much truth.
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Page 17, the second sentence of the description of Animate Objects reads:

"Objects to be animated may not be in the possession (worn or carried) by any creature, and
must be non-magical in nature..."

It should probably read:

"Objects to be animated may not be in the possession (worn or carried) of any creature, and
must be non-magical in nature..."
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Page 19, the first sentence of the description of Cloudkill, reads:

"This spell creates a 20'x20'x20' cloud of poison gas which moves at a rate of 10' per round under the control of the caster (so long as they concentrates on it)."

It should probably read:

"This spell creates a 20'x20'x20' cloud of poison gas which moves at a rate of 10' per round under the control of the caster (so long as they concentrate on it)."
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