TL1 Beneath the Silver Spire
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Re: TL1 Beneath the Silver Spire
I just started reading through The Silver Spire. On page 2, paragraph 5 is a common mistake with the English language:
"Powerful but elderly, wise but overly confident, the infection ...."
In your sentence, the four descriptive phrases apply to the infection, not the village healer.
Paragraph 8 ends with an incomplete sentence: "At last, [he had] the space and privacy to
continue the work he’d begun years ago."
In Paragraph 9 it is unclear who was dispatched. You are compounding your pronouns.
"Powerful but elderly, wise but overly confident, the infection ...."
In your sentence, the four descriptive phrases apply to the infection, not the village healer.
Paragraph 8 ends with an incomplete sentence: "At last, [he had] the space and privacy to
continue the work he’d begun years ago."
In Paragraph 9 it is unclear who was dispatched. You are compounding your pronouns.
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Re: TL1 Beneath the Silver Spire
Right words wrong order is definitely a problem I have... closely followed by wrong word right order.
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Release 5 is up. It adds scale and direction to the GM's map and makes a few minor text and distance modifications.
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Release 6 adds one paragraph of standard verbiage into the Introduction, after Ganthar's stamp. It's the note about the compatibility of the game, and also specifies that it adds monsters from Field Guide Volumes 1 and 2.
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I'm happy to proofread this, but not until after I finish CC (or is it CC1?).
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CC. Books that aren't adventures don't get codes; however, we customarily shorten Equipment Emporium to EE, so there you go.
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The more the merrier, but there's no rush. This one is only a few weeks old and hasn't been playtested yet.JugglinDan wrote: ↑Mon Mar 27, 2023 3:50 pm I'm happy to proofread this, but not until after I finish CC (or is it CC1?).
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Re: TL1 Beneath the Silver Spire
Consider me on the list of volunteers then, and just let me know when/if you need me to do something.toddlyons wrote: ↑Mon Mar 27, 2023 4:21 pmThe more the merrier, but there's no rush. This one is only a few weeks old and hasn't been playtested yet.JugglinDan wrote: ↑Mon Mar 27, 2023 3:50 pm I'm happy to proofread this, but not until after I finish CC (or is it CC1?).
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Cool. I'll send you a PM!JugglinDan wrote: ↑Mon Mar 27, 2023 4:23 pm Consider me on the list of volunteers then, and just let me know when/if you need me to do something.
Re: TL1 Beneath the Silver Spire
I've been removing specific references to certain Field Guides, as long-term there will just be one combined FG; and there's no certainty the entries used in these adventures will even make it to the combined CC-licensed FG........
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